Intro: Hunting has been a controversial topic since the beginning of time. Hunting used to be a necessity to staying alive and still is. However, people have taken hunting to an extreme level and consider it to be a "sport." To analyze this argument I am going to look at two different sides. The first, a side of an active hunter and the second, a side of a animal rights activist. I believe myself to be somewhere in the middle of both of these extremes.
Outline:
Paragraph A: Intro
Paragraph B: Analyzing Sustainability
1. Article [a]
3. Article [b]
Paragraph C: Analyzing Morality
1. Article [a]
3. Article [b]
Paragraph D: Analyzing Animal Rights
1. Article [a]
3. Article [b]
Paragraph E: Analyzing hunting as a "sport"
1. Article [a]
Article [b]
Paragraph F: Conclusion
I really like your intro and the thesis. It states what you are clearly analyzing and gives you a lot of room to write something about. I know you may be in the middle of the argument but it would make your argument stronger if you took a side whether you agree or disagree. Also in the intro I would put which articles you are using into the intro.
ReplyDeleteYour introduction and thesis work well because they present your argument and what you'll be analyzing clearly, and it is broad enough to allow further elaboration of various topics related to your thesis. I would try to provide more introductory information regarding the topics you'll talk about in your body paragraphs, and try to reword your thesis to state that you'll be talking about those certain topics (sustainability, morality, and hunting as a sport). Also, you should use two of the readings listed in the "Paper 2 Handout" as your primary sources and analyze the topic along with them, and state which of these you'll be using in your introduction. So far, you've laid the groundwork for a great paper! Good Job :)
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